5 comments«1»Anonymous readerReport 2014-05-12 02:02:45Are you a native speaker of English? XXX Whether you are or are not, you clearly need editorial help. There are many spelling errors and the dialogue is rather stilted in several places. Whether you are or are not, you clearly need editorial help. There are many spelling errors and the dialogue is rather stilted in several places. Whether you are or are not, you clearly need editorial help. Whether you are or are not, you clearly need editorial help. ICTYBTIHTKYanonymous readerReport 2011-06-18 12:29:27good story want moreanonymous readerReport 2011-06-11 09:52:43I gave the story a positive rating, but you sure could use a good editor. Please get some!anonymous readerReport 2013-07-19 08:37:42Reading your story is difficult please get an editor/ghost reader before posting to help you form sentences into paragraphs.
