KREADERReport 2005-09-08 07:20:59Archaic, your ridiculous critique is longer than the story. You forgot “What happened to her hymen?”
Shit story. Xnxx 10 comments«12»READERReport 2006-10-12 22:57:10Now what is it about a good slow fuck between consenting teens that just sounds like it is O.K. Who wears a bra to bed? It`s as if you were there. to paraphrase St Bobo, erotica is pretty straight forward, its all about setting, characters, and descriptions. What do they look like, what color is the tent, are they in the mountains of Tennessee, or the Texas hill country, give us something to see. No sexual description. 10 comments«12»READERReport 2006-10-12 22:57:10Now what is it about a good slow fuck between consenting teens that just sounds like it is O.K. Also, you need to break the paragraph each time you add dialogue or change speakers.




















