If you’re going to title a story “Pixie Lust”, please add a little lust, and not just adventure and intrigue. XXNX When you have this many different characters in one scene, use fewer pronouns so it’s easier to keep track of what’s actually happening. If you’re going to title a story “Pixie Lust”, please add a little lust, and not just adventure and intrigue. When you have this many different characters in one scene, use fewer pronouns so it’s easier to keep track of what’s actually happening. =dreamer=«1» When you have this many different characters in one scene, use fewer pronouns so it’s easier to keep track of what’s actually happening. 2 comments«1»AquaMastaReport 2009-09-02 05:30:08Getting better, I like the story line but a little more “sex” or at least some touching would be nice.
