10/10READERReport 2005-09-09 15:18:30Hannah: If this is a true story how would you know every thing that was said or done. XXX That’s all you needed to say. I dont believe this is a true story. 1/10READERReport 2005-09-07 09:13:23Hannah, you have a pretty good geasp of the language but the inconsistancies hurt the story. You put a lot of effort into a story, make it count. It`s as if you were there. No ass fuck. Also, you need to break the paragraph each time you add dialogue or change speakers. Who wears a bra to bed? It`s as if you were there. What do they look like, what color is the tent, are they in the mountains of Tennessee, or the Texas hill country, give us something to see. What do they look like, what color is the tent, are they in the mountains of Tennessee, or the Texas
