But there is still quite a bit of potential here. Please by all means continue, I am interested in what could happen next!«1» 1 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2012-07-17 12:49:02Length is disappointing, detail was lacking and what was said has been done a couple thousand times on this site already. Xnx Don’t be afraid of using words and putting detail into things, tell us every movement, every thought going through the characters head. But there is still quite a bit of potential here. But there is still quite a bit of potential here. 1 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2012-07-17 12:49:02Length is disappointing, detail was lacking and what was said has been done a couple thousand times on this site already. But there is still quite a bit of potential here. Don’t be afraid of using words and putting detail into things, tell us every movement, every thought going through the characters head.
