It was a good story I guess, but it was bland, and kinda boring. XXNX 8 times in 18 hours don’t seem like much. For one thing, it shouldn’t have been told from the husband’s point of view, that’s just dumb. Unfortunately you did not do so good in excution. 7/10READERReport 2006-05-22 05:51:34boring and unorigional«12» For one thing, it shouldn’t have been told from the husband’s point of view, that’s just dumb. The ony two things she did beter than fuck were talk on the phone and spend my money, which is why she is my ex.READERReport 2006-05-23 17:23:59Since this is your fantasy, I wonder if you may be bi-sexual.READERReport 2006-05-23 15:23:48. . …gayREADERReport 2006-05-22 20:50:22You had a good idea, really. Either Kristi or Jack’s point of view, preferably Jack’s. Quick tip, if you’re gonna write an erotic story, tell it from the point of view of one of the people participating.
