Just needs some proof reading to make it easier to read.anonymous readerReport 2012-11-17 22:03:20Great story, keep it up. Please edit and repost!!!anonymous readerReport 2012-11-17 22:03:36Great story, keep it up. Xnx Just needs some proof reading to make it easier to read.«12» Just needs some proof reading to make it easier to read.«12» 10 comments«12»anonymous readerReport 2012-12-17 16:32:00want part 2, pleaseanonymous readerReport 2012-11-20 02:07:30When you have dialogue, use quotation marks and separate lines to make it easier to read.anonymous readerReport 2012-11-18 14:55:50I’d like to read this, but the grammar and spelling errors are making it a chore. Just needs some proof reading to make it easier to read.«12» 10 comments«12»anonymous readerReport 2012-12-17 16:32:00want part 2, pleaseanonymous readerReport 2012-11-20 02:07:30When you have dialogue, use quotation marks and separate lines to make it easier to read.anonymous readerReport 2012-11-18 14:55:50I’d like to read this, but the grammar and spelling errors are making it a chore.
