At the very least wait a day or two and then re-read it your self. Xnx Wish there was more description in the beatings the assholes got and the after effects and reactions of others at the party, but maybe you’ll give us more in your next attempt.anonymous readerReport 2013-09-14 12:21:29While I applaud your effort. I like and prefer “good guy”, “hero” stories, especially when the assholes get what they deserve. Not a great attempt for a first try plenty of room for improving.«1» Most were wrong words being used and some were sentences with words out of order and of course the most noticeable is the giant block of text which in itself is a pain to try and read even without having to try and decipher and figure out every lines screw ups. At the very least wait a day or two and then re-read
