Keep going at it, just try and edit the background of the story as well as the way you word your words. And when you brought up Mendy’s new boyfriend who stole everything from her, I had to re-read it to get the wording correct. XXNX J.A.G«1» Yours Truly. Yours Truly. If it’s only a fantasy story, make yourself taller, change the daughter’s name to Mindy or Wendy, explain what is wrong with your son (ie Bi-polar or ??)
Not a BAD story – just needs some improvement.anonymous readerReport 2012-08-11 02:18:40For the most part it’s a decent story from what I read but could be better. J.A.G«1» It’s also odd how you forget apostrophes for words like her’s. Ken Doesn’t have a job? If it’s only a fantasy story, make yourself taller, change the daughter’s name to Mindy or Wendy, explain what is wrong with your son (ie
