I’m not going to tell you to stop writing like some people will. XXX So like i said really work on your writing and proof read it be for posting. the story it self was ok but it was a little rough and it didn’t really have a flow at all.«12» 8 comments«12»anonymous readerReport 2013-05-12 06:16:48To the person who commented on my previous comment. To Thel20, you should proofread your comments, your writing and grammar was every bit as bad as the authors. Also sex scenes need to be expanded and have more detail, describe it more, say what there bodies look like, how the’re feeling that sort of thing, The thing with her friend was kind of strange. So like i said really work on your writing and proof read it be for posting.
