You need to slow down, alot! XXX Build it up. dont just rush to the sex scene. take some time and build up. 3. horrible spelling
2. 3. Build it up. You could do well with this but more detail! you need learn to use paragraphs. you need learn to use paragraphs. 10 comments«12»READERReport 2007-05-21 02:35:21no eroticaREADERReport 2007-05-21 01:52:10Alright, we need to have a talk. slow down. take some time and build up. (our selfs) But they weren’t writing a story now were they?READERReport 2007-05-20 09:23:27Shall I point out the irony of the reader who commented on the spelling, yet spelt “potential” incorrectly?READERReport 2007-05-19 15:42:513reasons why this sucked
1. Build it up. (our selfs) But they weren’t writing a story now were they?READERReport 2007-05-20 09:23:27Shall I point out the irony of the reader who commented on the spelling, yet spelt “potential” incorrectly?READERReport 2007-05-19 15:42:513reasons why this sucked
1. 3. 10 comments«12»READERReport 2007-05-21 02:35:21no eroticaREADERReport 2007-05-21 01:52:10Alright, we
