DO THEY KEEP FUCKING OR WAS IT A ONE TIME THING? XXNX DID THEY EVER FEEL ANYTHING FOR EACH OTHER BEFORE THIS? A longer build up would help, i.e. who are they and why should we care about them or want them together? personality and character traits, how they interact in normal situations, etc. DID THEY EVER FEEL ANYTHING FOR EACH OTHER BEFORE THIS? WHAT KIND OF RELATIONSHIP DID THEY HAVE BEFORE THIS? AS IS THIS WAS WAY TO SHORT AND WAY TO RUSHED AND NEEDS TO BE DELETED.anonymous readerReport 2013-07-15 21:15:41not good this reads like it should be chapter two not one. DO THE PARENTS FIND OUT? this is a first draft only and need major work before it is posted.
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Barbanegraz / Thammy Leviamont
