Also shit way to end it. that being said I know this is a work of fiction but you raced through several things that should have had more of a build up. Xnx Which in fact was rather annoying and I had to skip most of that scene since you kept using “She” to acknowledge both women. But didn’t like the Cliffhangers at the end though. You should had added more parts.Anonymous readerReport 2016-06-30 21:55:58Please do more the best stories I’ve ever read PleaseMerc098Report 2016-03-31 08:25:36ok so apart from the spelling and grammar errors, your story has much to be desired. Also shit way to end it. that being said I know this is a work of fiction but you raced through several things that should have had more of a build up. while the plot was decent and had some alluring elements, it was lacking character development
