you don’t have very many mistakes at all! Xnx ^_^ good plot line though.READERReport 2007-10-13 10:38:09Thanks I copied and pasted it to word to use spell check!READERReport 2007-10-12 10:43:22you have gotten so much better! Grammar is still shit. Grammar is still shit. too many grammar mistakes for my taste. Anything you want to see from any of the characters?READERReport 2007-10-20 00:16:14meh, it was okay… Grammar is still shit. ^_^ good plot line though.READERReport 2007-10-13 10:38:09Thanks I copied and pasted it to word to use spell check!READERReport 2007-10-12 10:43:22you have gotten so much better! I suggest proof reading it before you publish it.READERReport 2007-10-21 12:31:12I’m working on a second, any tips suggestions? I suggest proof reading it before you publish it.READERReport 2007-10-21 12:31:12I’m working on a second, any tips suggestions? 8 comments«12»Anonymous readerReport 2008-08-23 21:35:41Well its way better than the other ones.
