Put more description into how it stretches her and makes her feel like its tearing her apart as it enters her. XXX you need to build up to that shit.anonymous readerReport 2012-04-17 17:56:37it has potential , but needs to be slowed down , other then that excellant job«1» you need to build up to that shit.anonymous readerReport 2012-04-17 17:56:37it has potential , but needs to be slowed down , other then that excellant job«1» you need to build up to that shit.anonymous readerReport 2012-04-17 17:56:37it has potential , but needs to be slowed down , other then that excellant job«1» Remember, you’re starting off with your power character too, he should be tearing it up! I liked how original it was hopefully you do continue on with the series ^.^ it could go really far an there are so many possibilities with the set up.
