Idea of the story is great hopefully you have more ideas similar to this and you proofread and fix your future works before posting them. there where some many errors it was hard to follow the story. XXNX Wish there was more description in the beatings the assholes got and the after effects and reactions of others at the party, but maybe you’ll give us more in your next attempt.anonymous readerReport 2013-09-14 12:21:29While I applaud your effort. At the very least wait a day or two and then re-read it your self. Wish there was more description in the beatings the assholes got and the after effects and reactions of others at the party, but maybe you’ll give us more in your next attempt.anonymous readerReport 2013-09-14 12:21:29While I applaud your effort. Wall of text makes it hard to read.anonymous readerReport 2013-09-14 16:44:58spell check, smaller paragraphs.anonymous readerReport 2013-09-14 15:18:31Always re-read your
