Be a little more descriptive, and draw out the story a little more. If this is your very first piece of ero-literature, then you are off to a okay start. XXNX However, this one sadly made my stomach churn DUE TO THE FACT THAT THIS ONE WAS POORLY WRITTEN. You know, detail!anonymous readerReport 2013-08-10 07:06:24Okay, personally I am a fan of Incest writings. Be a little more descriptive, and draw out the story a little more. 37 comments«12345»Anonymous readerReport 2016-02-28 15:26:32mum fucking is so bloody hot, i love this story, pity you didn’t do her up the her tight arsehole though,
from misterjedi.anonymous readerReport 2013-08-10 07:06:33Okay, personally I am a fan of Incest writings. If not, then either do some research and read other people’s work, get laid, or find a new hobby.