Well thought out and well developed story-line. XXX but only if its in a positive sense. Well thought out and well developed story-line. get a good editor and do a rewrite and NEVER EVER POST A STORY WITHOUT GOING THROUGH A GOOD EDITOR FIRST«1» It was a good story and i didnt notice any grammatical errors that were obvious enough to see them in one read without scanning for them. Well thought out and well developed story-line. The first commenter was a retarded jackass so just ignore him. 5 comments«1»Anonymous readerReport 2014-07-26 22:46:18only a real ass would leave a story posted in this condition DELETE at once and rewrite it properly. It was a good story and i didnt notice any grammatical errors that were obvious enough to see them in one read without scanning for them.
