12 comments«123»anonymous readerReport 2013-04-04 21:09:15Lol, I was the first to read this cause the author is mah buddy. Also, proofread your stories. Xnxx it was just wam bam thank you mamanonymous readerReport 2013-03-28 21:20:33This had so much potential to be a better story. To start, the tab key exists for a reason. 12 comments«123»anonymous readerReport 2013-04-04 21:09:15Lol, I was the first to read this cause the author is mah buddy. To start, the tab key exists for a reason. No offense. I find it hard to believe you would be satisfied with this story if you reread it yourself. Build up the story a lot more, create foreplay, make details, etc. Finally, if you are going to write a sex story, or any story for that matter, make the theme, in this case, the actual sex, take up more than 4 paragraphs.
